Associate Name: Rex Costello
Main Advisor and OP Reviewer: Jennifer Dauksha-English

Output Packet #:  	3	Year: BSc Pre-Capstone
Date Submitted: July 2, 2014 - resubmitted July 13, 2014
Date Reviewed: July 16th, 2014
Mark: 72
Grade: B
Time Spent on Review: 3.75 hrs

Dear Rex,

Great OP, which I already knew since I reviewed it twice in draft form!

I'm so grateful to have had the opportunity to read your Output Packet in its entirety. Thanks for all of your work on both self and planetary levels. I'm very impressed by your documentation of this powerful project.

My review is broken into these sections:
1. Evaluation Form 
2. Comments Per Section

Required next step: 
1. Upload your self review to this page: http://portfolios.gaiauniversity.org/view/view.php?id=2063&showmore=1
2. Future OPs must have all required sections (this OP missing OP design process, annotated resource review and pathway reflection).

Recommended next step:
- Consider my feedback in future OPs.

I'm glad to be your advisor!

Cheers,
Jennifer

OP REVIEW-------------------------

1. EVALUATION FORM-------------------- 

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2. COMMENTS PER SECTION---------------

Birth of SunDog
- Awesome that you added the link to the album!
- Where is your self review - it should be posted on this page with the other reviews.

Summary
- Great that you added a link to previous OP. 
- Good background on musical ally Paul Olsen - but tell us what were your roles?
- You included context about when the project occurred and the purpose for this documentation. This summary leads into your sharing on key life lessons from the project. How is this different then an introduction?

Introduction
- Good opening. When you say you're going to discuss topics I suggest you say where the reader can find that. 
- I love the phrase 'sonic adventure'!
- Good overview of OP contents. Still say the page where this is found.
- Design of OP is not a design process. What you share here is information on how the OP is organized. In the future you absolutely must include a section on your design process for the OP and for the project you're documenting - that's two unique processes. What you have here is inadequate.

What is an Album?
- Excellent background on the evolution of the recording industry! Great that you included links.
- I like that you share what recording in your own home does for the experience.
- Typo at the end of first paragraph - stray And.
- You mention how you're going to share your process - but I do think it's important to share why you choose what you did from the hundreds of other options. It would be also good to compare some of these options - even if just from your experience or that of people in your peer group.
- Nice quote by Jeff Strong.
- Did you draw that little flow chart - if so give yourself credit under the image.
- Excellent break down of the four essentials everyone needs to know about recording: Sound Source, Space, Equipment, and Proficiency.  I really appreciated how you described each one in general and then also shared your personal choices. I would have preferred that you separated these visually simply by making your personal experience a separate paragraph or shifting the formatting in some way to break that up - otherwise it runs together.
- I appreciate how this material is included in a way that's really applicable to the reader - well done!
- You're mother sounds amazing Rex! I love humor around your relationship with her and this album.
- Great overview of key learnings.
- Nice reflection on distribution.
- I'm super impressed by how you have all these project tasks laid out. You did a great job managing all of this over 6-months.

Album Art
- Awesome story and I love Elena's art. I'm curious if you paid her or had some sort of energetic exchange?

Collaborations
- Wonderful that you had so many contributors to manifest this album!! They are all such beautiful people. I'm so happy for you.
- Great overview of how each person contributed. Once again I'm curious about the energy exchange - that would be helpful for the reader to know.

World Context
- I'm glad that you included this section though next time I'd like to see if greatly expanded on.
- On the guild notes - in the future I'd like to hear about how your relationship with just a single Gaia U peer impacted you. You can keep drawing off the same event - but be more specific and less general.

Conclusion
- Nice conclusive statement that weaves together some thoughts you opened with. I like the idea of a sonic community.
- On the commentary - this serves as a process summary/reflection for the OP - but not a design overview. What would you do differently next time?

Appendix
- Excellent note on analog versus digital. 
- Journal entry included.
- As for the template - if you go onto the GEL site under the OP bus there's various information there about OP guidelines and even a downloadable template (there are actually two options). I feel like I've also given you a list verbally at least once and via e-mail at least once. I'm sorry that this is a struggle for you - how do you propose we solve this block and move forward with more graceful ease and enthusiasm?