Main Advisor and OP Reviewer: Nicole Vosper
Associate Name: Sophie Viandier
Output Packet: 3      
Phase/ALC: BSc IESD Yr1
Date Submitted: 11th November 2014
Date Reviewed: 30th November 2014
Mark: 83
Grade: A
Time Spent on Review: 3 hrs + 0.5 for review forms

Dear Sophie,

A huge thank you for sharing your work. The pictures fed my soul and it was a pleasure to learn more about you and your important work. 
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Specifications & Abstract

Love the ‘touched lives and tummies’
Wow impressive that you have so much work & a separate body all about jump & sprout. Its great to see mahara being used in this way.
Great clear aims & overview

Commentary

Nice to see the GaSADIE… would be great to see more evidence of this being applied. Maybe a few bullet points about actions taken for each step, with a link to the evidence in mahara.
Thanks for including commentary about your pathway, I can’t wait for your next OP already!
Would be great to dive into more details about your professional & personal development
‘Deficient’ is an interesting word! Can it be re-framed differently?
Beautiful that you are in love :) What a huge healing step…
Great time log
Great you were able to stack OP & report writing
Laura gives brilliant feedback and really understands the Gaia U requirements, I’m glad this was a fruitful process for you.

The Garden

Great photographs
Great logo
Nice to read about the history
How have these principles and ethics influenced your own work and interaction with this project?
What a gorgeous photo!
Great to see the grassroots emergence of the project
Great to see different colours in the text, it really brings words to life/helps the reader interact with the writing
Sounds like the project has been consciously re-designed a number of times to optimise resources and impact

Tools and Techniques

Great, clear overview of the techniques you use and why.
Fabulous pictures
Great use of resources - make hay while the sunshines (or when the hay gets wet!)
Love your radical honesty about what was not working or wasting time & resources e.g. system for washing & packing produce
Extremely thrifty use of accessing resources
Great that you valued succession and it sounds like your induction process was thoughtful and effective

Pests

Maybe clarify if the page is supplementary reading or necessary reading for the reader (especially Gaia U reviewers who have limited time)
Great photos/overview of pests
How have you approached the situation? Have you influenced people with permaculture approaches? E.g. hierarchy of interventions? Integrated pest management?

Plants

Yarrow is a resilient plant, think it can grow in areas without good drainage also, so may not be the best indicator plant. However it is wonderful (I have a tattoo of it on my forearm!)
Once again, maybe indicate if the page is supporting material or not (as there is a huge amount of info on here)

Children in the garden

Fabulous!!

Garden suggestions

Great, practical advice

The Future of Jump & Sprout

Deb Cuddahy sounds very holistic & strategic in her thinking
The photos are fantastic of all the jars - where were they taken from?
What role do you play yourself in this project’s development?

Conclusion

Wonderful photograph

Reflections

Great commentary about un/learning teaching habits. How much of your role was educational? And how much gardening/horticulture?
Interesting observations RE leadership - it would be great to know more about these challenges, and explore these with your work.
Well done for navigating mahara best you could! You have done a great job and optimise it more than many would. Great that you have turned the problem into the solution and learnt some html tricks that you can share with others.
Your ‘journal and final reflection’ is quite light. There are also references to decisions that the reader might not know about e.g. you leaving the garden.

Supporting Evidence

Workers & Volunteers

Again great photos
Great feedback from volunteers
How has this influenced your design work? Or future organising with the garden?

Jump & Sprout Program

Fantastic to have tracked the amount of produce in pounds - I love how empowering this can feel when you have project results in numbers
Its also amazing to see these children centres working in a collaborative way like this
I am already making a list of people to send your work to!
An even better if  - more attention to font consistency especially size
HEAL - a great acronym! Might have to ask to borrow that for Feed Avalon!
Well done for including instructions for the reader
Super great visuals!!
Wow, what mouthwatering produce!
Brilliant to see the intergenerational integration
Oh my god the kids are so cute!!!!

The Curriculum

Great that teachers were taught gardening - much more resilient model
Educational programs can come & go so its really great if the teachers are enthused about something
I love the ‘how to involve family lists’
Are all of these materials copyrighted?

Permaculture Ethics & Principles

Was this page created to share with funders/users of the garden?

Additional Resources

Great list of resources
Strong amount of additional materials