Associate Name: Nicole Vosper
Main Advisor and OP Reviewer: Jennifer Dauksha-English

Output Packet #:  	5	Year: MSc Pre-Capstone
Date Submitted: March 25th, 2015
Date Reviewed: April 8th. 2015
Mark: 74
Grade: B
Time Spent on Review: 3.75 hrs

Dear Nicole,

I’m so delighted to be at the end of your first phase of MSc pathway! You’ve done an excellent job wrapping up this cycle:) The OP is fantastic and your cycle has such amazing projects that are of strategic value. I’m amazed at your ability to accomplish so much in such a short timeframe. You’re a powerhouse.

My review is broken into these sections:
1. Evaluation Form 
2. Comments Per Section

Required next step: 
- Add a cumulative annotated resource review

I respect your integrity in managing your pathway so effectively. As always, I’m glad to be your advisor! 

Cheers,
Jennifer

OP REVIEW-------------------------

1. EVALUATION FORM-------------------- 

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2. COMMENTS PER SECTION---------------

Overview
- As usual - great guidelines for reader. I think it would be helpful that you explain why certain bits are optional.
- For your next cycle know that mixed media does add to word count. Therefore you are actually going much more over word count. Ideally it should take someone 1-1.5 hrs to interact with your content included in the recommended size.
- Oh your dedication is beautiful. In what part of your life was Gilly involved?
- The specification seems a bit simplistic.
- See my comments in OP 4 on purpose of an abstract (you submitted OP 5 before receiving and benefiting from my feedback).
- I like that you can identify a specific model you’re using however I really need you to go into more depth of reflection on your experience as a designer. Once again - see my reflections in OP 4, this time on design.

Survey 1A
- Great overview of OPs. Like that you focussed on key outcomes.
-  I like that you included a projected timeline along with an actual timeline.
- I think it would be super insightful if you’d consider taking the time here to survey the patterns related to OP engagement/production and design process.

Survey 1B
- Same with OP page, I appreciate how you have reflected on each project and harvested key learning outcomes. 
- You provided clear roles for some but not all. You also named some key outcomes and others key yields/outcomes. I’m suggesting that you definitely be explicit about the roles and be consistent about the content you’re sharing. 
- Excellent links to supporting evidence.
- Love the summary of personal and professional outcomes at the bottom. It would be helpful if these each had a bulleted 1-3 words though before each description so I could see key outcomes from a glance.
- I love the empty cages logo! Do you know who made it?
- On political - when you say its a list only not in word count I think it would be helpful if you said why. 

Analysis and Assessment
- So immediately on this page I begin thinking that there’s some confusion about what’s the focal point of your assessment. Personally I think your OPs are too intertwined as far as the core report and commentary sections. To me the core report is everything related to the projects and the commentary is more about you and your processes. In this OP you decided to use SADIE as a framework - that works fine, especially since its a learning review, however I’m still wishing for more delineation. 
- Glad to see you really look for patterns. What about patterns that are serving you?
- Sweet goal tracking! I love the six root causes of unproductively.
- Fantastic self assessment and tracking happening here!
- I like the pattern recognition in investments.
- The field assessment speed sheet is impressive! I really value that you noted leaders in the field. I would encourage you too add maybe one column at the end to highlight overall tracking of that thread or even next steps.
- Nice that you’re valuing the strategic impact of your work. I like the questions approach.
- PoDAPO skill assessment a great addition!

Design and Implementation
- I think it’s useful that you included some thoughts on your next steps. 
- Would be great to see a timeline for generating your next LIPD here.
- How do you know for certain that there’s been no other vegan PDC? Seems like there may have been in countries where veganism is more common - perhaps India - maybe?

Commentary and Supporting Material
- It’s ok that you weren’t able to incorporate Pro Review feedback - nice that you were explicit about that.
- Time tracking seems like a guess - how did you determine this?
- Did I miss something - where is your cumulative annotated resource review from the entire cycle?
- I really appreciate you have tracking links all accessible here.
- I respect your gratitude - I appreciate you as well.

Reviews
- Self Review - I think that your feedback is thorough and honest. You give yourself realistic appraisal of your skills gained. I think your grade is maybe a bit low. Why is this not also cumulative? I’ll let it go though considering you added a section on PoDAPO that was in the report.
- Peer Review - I thought you did a great job providing Tommy with feedback. You gave specific examples as to how he could improve or what you found useful. Well done. I would encourage you to give a few more overall highlights and considerations however.