Associate Name: Nicole Vosper
Main Advisor and OP Reviewer: Jennifer Dauksha-English

Output Packet #:  	1	Year: MSc1
Date Submitted: June 5th
Date Reviewed: June 19th
Mark: Pass
Time Spent on Review: 3 hrs + 0.5 on self and peer reviews

Nicole,

I'm so grateful to have had the opportunity to read your LIPD Output Packet. This is such crucial work for everyone to be engaged in and I'm so thrilled to have your work as a model for others - because you pulled together a really stellar LIPD! I had a lot of fun interacting with this. I hope you can tell that though my feedback. As an MSc I decided to push you any chance I saw - hope that aligns with your needs. 

Thanks for all of your work on both self and planetary levels.

My review is broken into these sections:
1. Evaluation Form (attached)
2. Comments Per Section

Required next step: 
- Post your review of your peers OP on the same page as your own self review, using the comments feature is fine.

Recommended next step:
- Review my feedback and let me know your thoughts - was I too edgy for you? Was it constructive enough?

I respect your integrity in managing your pathway. I'm super glad to be your advisor! What fun it will be to read these amazing OPs you have planned.

Cheers,
Jennifer

OP REVIEW-------------------------

1. EVALUATION FORM-------------------- 

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2. COMMENTS PER SECTION---------------
I just love your OP! You're so thoughtful and insightful. It's clear you're also super excited about geeking on action learning tools!! Yeah! I'm so glad to see ho much this process shaped where you're at right now. Its clear you benefited a lot. There's so much passion and purpose within your LIPD - thanks for sharing Nicole.

Overview
- Great welcoming context
- Sentence first bullet odd construct with the "to support me to identify". Better maybe to say to support me in identifying… Better yet, as a grant writer I learned never to put to at the front of a bullet - you want the bullet to be active and powerful - so begin with action, which here would be either starting with the word support or supporting or skipping that and beginning with identifying. Some say the ing tense is more active. 
- All of these bullets seem a bit wordy can you condense each down by 2/3 or 1/2 but convey same message?
- Good summary of purpose none-the-less.
- Great 'how to navigate OP' message.
- On the abstract: I like that you overviewed the sections (so many folks overlook that essential context). To me an abstract usually includes: Brief motivation (what and why), brief context and problem or purpose statement, summary of methodology, summary of sections, findings, and implications. You got a lot of this in the overview though I felt like being so succinct in the abstract misses the mark on its purpose. Perhaps if you just said: Abstract (summary of contents) or noted that you were just diving into section summary. Just a thought.
- Love the background - how inspiring. I hear you and relate to the childhood connection with animals. Just all around excellent summary of your life path - well done.
- The summary of key un/learnings seems a bit fragmented from the amazing flow you shared in the background. Maybe a sentence of context explaining why you're sharing this before you dive in. I'm confused as to how this creates the foundation for what is to come next in the following sections.
- You are such an amazing action learner! Gosh I'm so thrilled to be your advisor - I imagine I'll learn a lot from your OPs and our connection.

Survey
- Succinct context - I'm with ya.
- Sweet map on projects. I marvel at how we're capable of so much diversity - yet aware of overlap and integration. 
- I resonate with a lot of your interests, again glad to have our connection.
- I'm so thrilled you included a summary of how you identified your skill flexes - please pass that thought on to other Gaia U. Associates.
- It's required that all Associates track their progress and so few really grasp what we mean - so am delighted to have another example.
- Suggest rather than marking x on your tracker - give it a number so that you can later create value based charts or graphs on comparing your progress when you touch base in future pathway reflection sections. It would be cool that you assessed your tracker categories with each OP.
- Future casting is such a useful tool!  You say MSc period - it would be helpful for the reader I think to know what that means - 2 years - 4 years…?
- This list is impressive, and it leaves me with quantifying questions - what does successful mean - can you turn these webs you're casting into quantities or qualities? Sometimes that helps with the power of manifestation. When you say a successful nursery - I don't think the universe or I knows where on the spectrum you mean of success, by adding some clarifying point of context you can give it more life.
- With the future casting - how could this tool be used to let us know if this is realistic? Is there a place for considering ideal-middle-just getting by versions? I'm just thinking it would be cool to see something like this mapped out - like this is where I'm at now and here's where I'd like to be ideally, but if not there here's the middle. I realize you were just creating the story - though it was so juicy I began wondering how this tool might be used for more impact and action, along with context. Great way to break each project down though. Hope you don't think I'm being picky - I'm always thinking about integration, context and action - so was asking myself those questions more about this tool than about what you shared really.
- I love the bit on radicle writes! Can we brainstorm for a bit someday about your involvement in Gaia U?
- You're working on these diploma's outside of Gaia U?
- I'm so curious what's the hardcore scene like? It's not something I'm too familiar with.
- Radical herbalism - love it!
- I have this project I'm working on right now that feels radical to me anyway - I'm for three months only eating out of my garden and pantry - am on week 3 so far - going great!

Analysis
- Exceptional LIPD design process overview!
- So glad to see the articulation of your decision making criteria. I think this section could use a mini introduction at the top for some context rather than just diving in. What do you want the reader to take away from this section? What do these categories have to do with decision making? Provide some context for us - why is this important to you and for us?
-  I know Rafter Fergussen - worked with him on a project back in January. Great guy. He thought I was too New Age which I detested.
- I value your thoughtfulness in what you consider before diving into a project. Super meaningful Nicole.
- On the opportunities - this lead in sentence jives with what I was feeling lacing in the previous section on decision making. Why is it that some sections got this extra attention from you? There's some rivalry going on here- Decision Making is going to take a radical stand for its rights to be heard and understood.
- The opportunities are so inspiring - wow what potential. It's great to see what you're engaged with!!
- How do these opportunities stack on top of what we've already learned through the survey? Why these categories?
- Medicinal landscaping - nice, will that be combined with edibles?

Pathway Design
- Descriptive overview, makes me feel grounded in what's being shared - nice link back to previous sections - good weaving.
- The undertaking! Very succinct holistic purpose statement. This has a lot of power and energy here.
- Commitments - this is super that you included such catalyzing productivity generators. You have so much capacity to get it done and get it good! Now again drop the to in these two sections? To dedicate, what about dedicate or dedicating is even more present. What's the most powerful way to grab these points and go with it? The image of the fist with herbs comes to mind and 'to' is just too polite and only possible. Dedicate! Take! Utilize! Use! Maintain! Yes! 
- Very strategic! We need more of this in Gaia U:) Especially appreciate the first one - creating that acceleration of speed and scale of the entire field of work.
- Good rationale provided for why OPs need to be complex.
- The graphic would be more integrated into the section if it had ALC inside the center - non-Gaia U folk might not get the 4-steps.
- Someday we should organize a Financial Permaculture event in London.
- How do these three pillars come out of your survey and analysis? Encourage you to articulate the thread.
- Excellent OP topics - I'm enthusiastic about each one. You're passion really shines through with each short description - well done!
- For non-Gaia U folk this OP overview may be better with a mini introduction making those threads explicit. 
- Output design attachments exceptional. Again an absolute jewel - what a resource to share as a template to other Gaia U Associates!
- You share 2 OP designs but not a third - you may want to say this in the welcome text for this section, otherwise the reader might think you just lost steam or that you overlooked adding the link - I'd prefer more intentionality and explicitness.
- Your MSc pathway is ambitious but if anyone can pull it off its someone like you! 
- Another gem here - the SMART targets are impressing me even further. I take back what I said earlier about being quantitative and qualitative - you've got it covered well beyond what I envisioned - amazing! I guess we had the same web of thinking. My only suggestion then would be to connect this verbally back to that future casting and some of the other nuggets OR say back then how this might lead into some more explicit targeted goals. I think I like that later version where you plant the seed for us when you bring up that future casting tool and then follow through in the report by water the seed and bringing it to fruit.
- How are you going to utilize these SMART targets for tracking your progress - do you have any intentions?

Implementation
- Designing models - wonderful!
- Yes I can tell you are a forever learner, me too!
- 'learnt' must be an English term.
- The Learning Support System Design is once again a treasure. We are so lucky to have you as an Advisor, cause you get it! You've nailed what it is we are seeking. I wish I had more time right now to dive into this section - it's so intriguing. Maybe we can geek out about this one day.
- Timeline seems practical. On track so far! 
- I wonder if it would be useful for you to mention what you would do if you did need to renegotiate this timeline?
- Conclusion is a bit brief- had you considered taking a pulse on how this process led you to where we landed to weave it all?

Supporting Evidence
- Resonate with the benefits of slow cooking. My LIPD took a year!
- Like your motto so to is it mine, though I've recently changed strategic to conscious. As you can tell by my feedback integration is essential to me - I think you can tell that with all my jamming on about context and weaving! Well we have that in common and I think we're both pretty damn effective.
- Lovely to see you integrating feedback. Well stated.
- The commentary on un/learnings is unique - haven't seen that in an OP before. I like it a lot. Do you mean vectors though? Vectors are generally points of disruption in Permaculture - I thought. I was thinking you meant pivot points or catalyzing moments? I looked up vector and it also means a means to get to a point (used in flight lingo). I see that then.
- Am going to check out that Tarot deck - nice. I use Shapeshifters deck. I love that you reflected on your pathway via the Tarot. I do this at every great transition in my life.
- Great annotated resource review!
- A friend of mine Karen Stupski (Gaia U graduate) is really into Liberation Ecology.