Associate Name: Rex Costello
Main Advisor and OP Reviewer: Jennifer Dauksha-English

Output Packet #:  2		Year:  Capstone BSc
Date Submitted: February 1st, 2016
Date Reviewed: February 10th, 2016
Mark: 73
Grade: B
Time Spent on Review: 3.75 hrs

Dear Rex,

I'm so grateful to have had the opportunity to read your Output Packet. Thanks for all of your work on both self and planetary levels.

My review is broken into these sections:
1. Evaluation Form 
2. Comments Per Section

Required next step: 
- Add missing elements noted in PoDAPO.

Recommended next step:
- Edit the few photos that are under text.

I respect your integrity in managing your pathway. I'm glad to be your advisor!

Cheers,
Jennifer

OP REVIEW-------------------------

1. EVALUATION FORM-------------------- 

(attached)

2. COMMENTS PER SECTION---------------

Title and Summary
- Lovely overview of project, including the description of retreat focus and goal.
- I like the overview the report focus.
- Good navigation on how to read report.
- Great to see that you really took a lot of time to fill out your self evaluation. I’m really glad to read these reflective comments. Did you intend to give yourself a 3.45 in each field? Did you intend to leave your name off the top?

Project Description
- I am so appreciating your professionalism. Your report is very succinct and intelligently presented. Your points are pointed and easy to connect.
- Nice story on spontaneous intuitive decision making followed by clear context on why and what.
- I love that you added personal context and inspirations on why this is important. Ahh … then you provide world context - Yes!! However, next time I’d like to see more reference to: 1. world views that you’re working with/to transform, 2. identify the field you’re working within and resources or work cited/assessed/compared, and 3. gaps and added value in the field (comparing your work to others - critique/expansion/interventions…)
- Your OP design isn’t adequately articulated. In the future I need identification of models, methods and principles used (frameworks). What you did is just listed steps you took. Not enough. Your mind map is definitely headed in the right direction. I need more of this.

Project Design A and B
- I think this page needs a micro introduction.
- Gorgeous images!
- I like the overview of activities, framework, retreat specifications. 
- Good mix of practical with personal experience.
- So once again, I need to see more focus on articulating design of the project. each time you submit an OP you are to conduct a design cycle for the project and the OP - that’s two design processes.
- Part B has some awesome context, history, function and personal experience. 

Project Outcomes
- Tools shared - nice!
- Maybe distinguish between personal and professional outcomes?
- Yes! Great that you included outcomes in the field - well done! More of this in future OPs. You’ve a lot to say and let it shine bright.
- OP Process reflection is an opportunity to track whether or not you met your design goals.
- How are you disseminating your work?
- How are you stepping into leadership?

Conclusion
- I keep noticing that some of your picture overlay with text. Talk to Ava about fixing this.
- Very awesome conclusive statements! This is well done. I agree the OP is prolific. Your best so far.
- Its valuable that you added a summary of key outcomes along with next steps.
- In the future consider creating an OP that has a a more distinct report and commentary. The report is for the public and the commentary is for your reviewer. I feel that you have it mixed together, and too much Gaia U type process reflection might be inaccessible or irrelevant to the public.  Some of the un/learnings and reflections on process could be added to commentary, for example.

Resources
- Good page description.
- These need to be annotated.
- I’m appreciating the number of resources - impressive.

Commentary
- Good note on participation and time management. Perhaps share a bit more on tools used for time, project and decision making management.
- This final page is more supporting evidence than commentary. Perhaps change the title.
- You’re completely missing LIPD reflection on process, goals, skill flexes and timeline mgmt.
- On that same note I don’t see you assessing your evolution as a designer or commenting on feedback incorporated.