Associate Name: Rex Costello
Main Advisor and OP Reviewer: Jennifer Dauksha-English Morgan

Output Packet #:  	4	Year: Capstone BSc
OP Title: Band Management & The Birth of Ecstatic Union

Date Submitted: August 30, 2016
Date Reviewed: October 17th, 2016
Mark: 70
Grade: B
Time Spent on Review: 3.75 hrs

Dear Rex,

Another great OP! I’m very much looking forward to supporting you in wrapping up your pathway soon! Well done:) You did include almost all the required content elements, however some don’t have the depth of content I’m seeking. My request is that you work with me diligently on OP 5 to fix some of these gaps.

My review is broken into these sections:
1. Evaluation Form 
2. Comments Per Section

Required next step: 
- Missing self review file (you accidentally uploaded peer review twice. re-upload and send to me by e-mail).
- Guild meeting and notes - add to OP 4
- Write a 100 word journal entry on how you’re going to respond to my feedback. Send it to me by e-mail.
- Read in detail the comments in the PoDAPO - there and next steps I’m making clear for your OP 5.
- I want you to submit for a draft review before final submission of OP 5.

I respect your integrity in managing your pathway. I'm lucky to be your advisor!

Cheers,
Jennifer

OP REVIEW-------------------------

1. EVALUATION FORM-------------------- 

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2. COMMENTS PER SECTION---------------

Commentary
- I see that you  
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- Great succinctness in your abstract. It’s very crisp and professional. I would suggest that you add key outcomes  of band leadership, etc… if there’s any integrated point you’re sharing aside from just documenting the journey.
- OP design method - so are you saying that you were unaware that these design templates were provided? I feel that I’ve told you about them more than once.
- On design, choosing a template is not a design process. 
- You mention publishable report - is there an element of this OP that you did get published?
- Digiphon - you could also mention tools you may have used for the project.
- Good overview on updates. I’m impressed with how you’re laying out your pathway intentions and meeting them.
- It’s required that you have a guild session with each OP submission.
- Remind me if you’ve completed the OR elements.
- MTMP section is generally more about the tools and resources you’re using to manage your time and projects.
- On skill flex assessment - you’re not really tracking the skills and learning intentions you set out for yourself in the LIPD. I need to see you clearly assess that in your OP 5. I do like how you use the 5 P’s here and am interested in why you choose to combine planetary/personal. Love what you shared on matrix, and I felt the same way about Bernie.
- Where are your goals for the OP? The project goals are shared with concise and powerful language - well done! You’re getting really good at writing.
- Nice logo!
- On incorporation of feedback, you didn’t add any examples of feedback you received from me or your peers about this or previous OP work. The idea is for you to explain how you’re responding to or incorporating feedback.
- You say you plan to make the OP available on your website, has that happened yet? IF so, have you received any feedback?

Core Report
- Sweet genre Live electric shamanic folk-rock! <3
- Great introduction. My only suggestion would be to add relevance and inspiration for the reader. Speak as if you’re teaching someone about performing gigs rather than just telling your process to document your process and get the OP done.  Inspiration provides connection and relevance provides purpose.
- You do a great job actually of this ^^ inspiration in the project scope - though you’re talking about the listener of your music, rather than the reader of the OP. Can you consider this a similar kind of experience?
- Awesome focuses for music - empowerment, transformation…!
- Wow - moving to LA. That’s a big deal. I look forward to hearing how that’s going for you. I didn’t realize LA was the place to be for music.
- On project scope - are you saying that Simha had Organization, Prioritization, Leadership and Flexibility in his OP? Explain where he got them from or what these four topics represent. What questions are they the answer to? Other than essential action for success. Did he come up with them, or you?
- What type of leadership model do you all use?
- Under personal - you also say your role as a leader has deepened, but how?
- The context background on your entry into music is pretty inspiring. I like how you weave in personal, peer and world. I would suggest you add a section on actual skills and learnings/ best practices you’ve gleaned that helped you succeed where you are now.
- So under interventions, here’s an example of how you’re telling a personal story without explicit teachings to the reader. This type of sharing really needs to be worked on as you need to expand out from your core to be a guide and teacher. Which you are, but I need you to reposition your reference point. You could’ve approached this section by sharing three key learnings / take aways that were part of the larger picture, which included interventions. How could you communicate this in a way that others might be able to witness/recognize something similar and intervene in an important moment as you did?
- How is the 3rd intervention, an intervention? Eric leaving isn’t an intervention, its a transition. An intervention is when you intentionally observe parts of a system and identify a change needing to be made or a gap needing to be filled. So you tweak the system by stating the design change, implementing and man again that change, and tracking the progress and outcomes. You’re not really following through with a complete design process. You’re just stating a situation that has arisen.

Critical Evaluation
- Inspiring opening describing the field.
- The bit on building a brand and music being emotional is powerful. There’s a lot that can be shared about this power and how its shaped society for good and bad outcomes. 
- I’m not sure how to incorporate the different bits you add from  a philosophical point of view, other than your final statement about the direction of where music is headed. I’m otherwise unsure what your main talking point is and I reread the section three times.
- On adding value, I get that you’re aligning yourself with these powerful musicians you mention, and have the aim to emulate the impact they are having on the world. I also hear your promotion of music as a way to inspire individuals, and even for them to express themselves musically. 
- I appreciate your thoughtful reflections around music and find this section to be very inspiring and deeply connective to your life path and purpose. However, though this is evidence of critical thinking, it’s not really highlighting your research or comparative assessment skills. What would have been a good way to demonstrate this, is to focus on band leadership, and how various bands function - rather than focussing on a meta level philosophical reflection.
- The matrix bit has a sweet reflection on impact and feedback from fans. If you could include a bit more on steps that musicians can make to be impactful - what does that look like? How does that differ from non-impactful music? What do artists do for one versus the other? Also, consider explaining more bout your own matrix busting. You’re own internalized oppressions. Self talk that might not be serving you. Beliefs that are outdated. How are you sharing and transforming your own un/leanring?
- You and your friends have great band names.
- Something is up with the images on this page - they are on top of the text.
- Because you’re a BSC Associate and this is your project, I’d like to ask you to consider what else you’re doing to educate people about music, could you be doing some performances in conjunction with fundraisers - like back in the Bernie days - do a fundraiser for Bernie? or a fundraiser for Standing Rock? If you used your music to inspire change on that scale, I’d see even more significant benefits to the field.
- I do not see that you used a design process or principles for this OP.

Supporting Evidence
- Journal entires - check:)
- Annotated resource review is finally annotated, good. The amount of sources you’re referencing is pretty minimal for a BSc. Given that this is an ongoing pattern, I’m going to need you to pick up your pace with research.
- Where is your evidence of outcomes related to the project?