Associate Name: Rex Costello
Main Advisor and OP Reviewer: Jennifer Dauksha-English Morgan

Output Packet #:  5		Year: BSc Capstone (IESD)
Date Submitted: Final Pathway Proposal Submitted March 20th
Date Reviewed: March 27th, 2018
Mark: 70
Grade: B
Time Spent on Review: 3.75 hrs

Dear Rex,

Congratulations! I am so ‘ecstatically’ proud of you! I have so enjoyed serving as your Advisor for the last 6-years. Here you are at the end of your pathway, with only a few minor steps to complete. Exciting! I’m sure you’re ready to celebrate. Yay!!

I had fun reminiscing about your pathway in reviewing this final OP.

My review is broken into these sections:
1. Evaluation Form 
2. Comments Per Section

Required next step: 
- Self review needs to be cumulative (and be specific with examples, don’t just say I did this, share how)
- Your section on experimentation/intervention doesn’t include any evidence of how you’re tracking your trials/prototypes with others in your field - either colleagues or participants of your work. Can you add another layer of this onion that shows you’re trailing ideas on or with others and harvesting their feedback.  You’re section on incorporation of feedback is also a bit thin, so you’d stack functions by adding a few more reflections.
- Your supporting evidence needs to include more validation of your pathway. You must have pictures of yourself doing the recordings/workshops, and of live performances? How about a website and sample fliers? Your supporting evidence page is a little thin. This is especially important given your thematic choice.
- Compare OBREDIMET as a log-frame versus an iteration. Just a few sentences will do.
- Go back to that chart you made of your skill flexes and add a sentence or two reflection on any patterns you see related to your numerical values.

Recommended next step:
- Can you rename the section on page 4 Experimentation to include the word Interventions?

I respect your integrity in managing your pathway.  You did it! What a success:)

Much love,
Jennifer

OP REVIEW-------------------------

1. EVALUATION FORM-------------------- 

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2. COMMENTS PER SECTION---------------

Specification
- Nice opening picture - fun! Looks like a very sacred space:)
- Do you need to add anything in navigation regarding links?
- In the overview you say that the pathway is a year and a half yet then continue by implying that the LR began in January 2017. That feels a little confusing, as it took another year for you to complete the final OP. How about leave out the year and a half comment and just say dates?
- Good succinct purpose statements shared in active tense. Are these the goals? If so how might you track their completion?
- I recommend adding a sentence at the top of your abstract that sums up the OP and then says you’re sharing the section summaries. As it is now you just jump directly into sharing bulleted list of contents.
- So these are the key components of this OP: 1. outlines my work as a growing professional musician, producer, band leader, and ever-evolving human, constantly learning from the many teachings offered through life and relationship. 2. This Output Packet acts as a platform to structure my intuitive and often non-linear approach to design as shown through my projects, OPs, skill flex developments, methods, resources, and future steps. 3. My key un/learnings focus around the topics of organization, time & project management, realistic appraisal and implementation of goals, design methodology, leadership, pattern recognition, relational navigation, professional development, and self-initiation.
- OP Process reflection, “Its liken to running a long marathon, being so close to the finish line, knowing the end is in sight, but can't help the nagging urge to collapse from exhaustion and 'throw in the towel' before its over.” How about it’s similar to? And I would suggest cutting it into two sentences.
- Impressive edge pushing Rex. I can definitely tell your writing style has improved considerably. I agree that you’ve gained skill in taking large complex concepts and making them into concise points. 
- Inspired human - that you certainly are!!
- I think it would really boost your OP design section on page 1 if you included how we met in TN to windstorm strategies for your path forward.
- How will you track these goals?
- Digiphon - check! I would almost love to see a drawing or picture of all the equipment you used for recording. I suggest including a photo that has text boxes labeling different equipment.
- Word count section titles are a bit confusing. You say Main Report 6282 words - does that mean pages 1-2?
- I’m glad that you took my feedback and added a section on design.
- I’m impressed by your review of Xavier’s OP. I liked how you gave him clear tips on how to make improvements, like when you gave him examples of supporting evidence he could include.
- Your self review doesn’t have your name or any information at the top - please fill that out. When you complete personal evaluations - please state how. For example you say, “Yes this OP showcases my bakance between thinking and doing very well.” Firstly, there’s a spelling error. Secondly, how am I supposed to know what you mean? That’s not an evaluation. That’s you filling it in to seemingly get it done. At a minimum state where you or how you provided this balance.

Core Report
- Good overview on project design, however it’s lacking a lot of the steps that we took. I’m going to hold off on giving feedback on this section until I read your section on design.
- Yes your Capstone phase was significantly more professional and well organized/tended.
- Ok so I am still very perplexed that after all of our conversations about design, you state that design is an analytical framework.  I would love to have one more conversation about the subject to see if we can define design as being an intuitive and agile process? I think the documentation of design might be quite analytical for you, but all of your intuitive decision making is still design in my opinion. I’m not saying my opinion needs to be true for you. Would you be willing to discuss one more time!? LOL. I’m wanting to make sure that you graduate with at least the impression that for some people, like myself, design is very intuitive (given that you’re graduating with a degree in design).
- I’m glad to see that in the introduction right column you do mention that your process of design is intuitive.  So there you are claiming that design is intuitive. You say that you like the storytelling/narrative approach. Let’s see if we can communicate more about design from that lens/style.
- In your skill flex assessment you share 3 skills. How did you select these 3? I know that you have many others. What do you mean by qualitative? Generally qualitative is unmeasurable data. It’s more about characterization and attributes. Quantitative refers to measuring size and scope. I’m just sharing this as some of what you discuss is amounts and timeframes.
- Nice timeline. I actually like that you have a hand drawn map! I would recommend that you label this “Original timeline”. I know you follow up in the next paragraph saying it took an extra year+. I just think it’s important to consider OPs from a glance. Not everyone reads the details.
- Lovely process reflection regarding your fear of failure.
- The little note paper on skill flex goals has four goal categories and they don’t match the categories above, so I would just note that adding a sentence to distinguish how these two are connected or unique would be helpful.
- I’m really digging your skillful chart! I’ve never seen one quite like this, especially hand drawn. Neat! Once again, how does this add to the skill flex sections above? Is it building on or expanding from above? Also, you did a good job providing the categories and rating your progress, however you forgot two important elements. 1. explain to use what is the scale - is this from 0-10? and how did you determine the scale value?, 2. what are the patterns that you see here?
- Wow what an intense transition with Paxson parting. Much love to you and your mom. Complex and yet cool that you started connecting with Frank.
- Good 5-P update. I’m glad that you and I have been able to connect in person! It was actually at least 4 in person points of connection -right? CA twice and TN twice.
- So with Patrix, yes I know that you’re engaged at helping people think differently via listening to your music, yet I’d like to hear more. What specifically are you trying to shift and why is it so important?
- Nice summary of key pattern observations. Have you assed whether or not these patterns are serving you? Have you intervened in shifting or refining any of these patterns?
- Brief summary of OPs 1-4 - check!

Design Report
- Nice opening on the subject and scope of design. You touch on the philosophical concept of design and the practicalities.
- Appreciate the John Hesket quote and your follow-up integration on it’s all-encompassing nature.
- I’m glad you included the section on right and left brain, however, consider that the act of choosing an appropriate method comes with entire box of consideration and tools. Would be lovely for you to unpack that box a bit more. There are so many conditions in the human brain that influence our ability to engage and make decisions (for instance).
- Would be useful if you explained how OBREDIMET could be used as a log-frame or iterative process. It is essentially a log-frame model, and it can be tweaked to become iterative. This is important. You provide three methods yet two of them are categories of design models and OBREDIMET is an actual model.
- Great that you included a reflection on your evolution as a designer. Amazing to think you were 21 when I met you:)
- The three examples of design models you applied is exactly what I wanted to see - great!
- You comparative assessment of design models is fascinating, yet doesn’t really capture what I had intended when I asked you to do this reflection. I’m intrigued by the two approaches you speak on regarding booking tours. I recall you telling me about your realizations for booking and I know you’re intentional about your process. Though this is a comparison, it’s not a breakdown of two models. What I would suggest is that you add a few sentences to your section above on OBREDIMET. As I mentioned, you could compare log-frame versus iterative approaches by talking about OBREDIMET.

Pathway Reflection
- Agreed! You managed your pathway so much more clearly and effectively this phase. I’m proud of you Rex!
- Lots of transformation:)
- Interesting reflection with your connection to Lawrence. Yes you both have very similar processes and edges. Super cool your were both part of Outward Bound.
- In your participation you could also mention that you did attend a Gaia U in-person event. Even though it was years a go, that’s a big deal, and impressive.
- In the section on experiments - how was Paititi one of the most insightful and rewarding journeys of your life? And in regards to experiments - do you feel comfortable sharing what were the trials? I don’t mean the challenges. I mean you obviously experimented with many concoctions. I am wondering which ones brought what results, and what tools helped you get over the intense challenges?
- On the Wayfarer residency, the intervention was juggling roles. But what was the various experiments? You tested what against what? 
- Amazing storytelling about the move to LA and all the outcomes!

Supporting Evidence
- Congratulations on all of the albums Rex! I’m excited to listen to your 2017 Ecstatic Union!
- Great reflections on those content workshops! Would be helpful if you added images.
- The resource review has enough content to meet the minimum requirement, however you’re not evidencing clear annotation, nor standard bibliography MLA formatting. Check out this link:
https://www.sciencebuddies.org/science-fair-projects/science-fair/writing-a-bibliography-mla-format, and here’s a link to annotations: https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/614/02/
And here’s an example that includes the citation and annotation: http://guides.library.cornell.edu/annotatedbibliography