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	•	Super graphically nice! Love the fonts, the blue, the central pic. Yes! 
	•	Maybe format the picture with a bit more of a space between it and the text 
	•	Super clear introduction 
	•	Very clear specification 
	•	Wow I like the spiral! Great that you are becoming more adept with GSADIE 
	•	Interesting language - ‘our state, our nation’ 
	•	I’d definitely working with a peer or employing a peer/Gaia U associate to help with mahara processing if you need it so it’s not as laborious for you! It’s funny I definitely find the layout/formatting nature of mahara the easiest task in the OP cycle compared to writing/doing the analysis work! 
	•	Great OP evaluation 
	•	Retreat and reflect sounds great, and very sensible! Definitely something I want to integrate more into my life after reading your OP  
	•	I’m so happy for you that you are financially stable again! I know precarity is a huge stress  
	•	Paying leverage points - yes! Took me a long term to learn these also (and still learning) 
	•	Transition design - yes, yes, yes - so great when you find a niche that calls you 
	•	I love the pathway tracking commentary - you are a brilliant writer and communicator  
	•	So happy you are working with Jennifer now as your main advisor. The changes in Gaia U were definitely disorientating and I’m sorry again for stepping back from supporting you.  
	•	Love your development in managing time and promises, definitely sounds like a similar system to myself  
	•	Sp - in project integration section ‘separate set of’ (needs a space) 
	•	It says access denied for your Skillflex analysis  
	•	Is there a way you can integrate more time for creating regular or deeper journal entries into your pathway? Maybe as part of a weekly check-in on how you’re feeling? 

Core Report

	•	Yay graphics! 
	•	Worth creating a bit of a margin on your pictures 
	•	What a great job to land!  
	•	Yes yes yes - I love it when these tools are used collectively - builds so much more power and connection  
	•	That’s so brilliant you had such a competent and skilled group to work with 
	•	I love that the sessions included the body and dinner, hell yeah  
	•	Really good reflection on the zero-one session error, sometimes you just gotta learn the hard way with these things  
	•	Sounds like a much more regenerative model of finance and great you had so many applications  
	•	Naming norms - yes, absolutely critical  
	•	So many super useful reflections. I’m sure the next program will be massively easier to organise. People laugh at me, but I never go on a course the first year it’s running, because I know it’ll be a prototype and in the coming years ahead it will be improved :) 
	•	Sp - in living theory U as a design process - Regular intention setting and reminders where key to keeping us on the path.  
	•	It would be good to have a comment in brackets or something if the pattern analysis is part of the wordcount or optional for the reader  
	•	Wow your pattern analysis is brilliant! It makes me feel inspired about permaculture being used as a tool for social change again  
	•	It would be great to include a bit more about the program’s bigger impact (or potential impact), the testimonials are great but I’d love to learn a little bit more about the projects and how this huge amount of work will contribute to climate change resilience in your region 
	•	Really like the action learning questions as forming the conclusion 

Supplement 

	•	Oooooh it’s so interesting and definitely a conversation for having a drink by a campfire, I feel like people comment on society as if it’s not meant to be designed this way and certain things are unexpected outcomes… but I feel this tension because I feel like the system is working pretty perfectly for those wanting to maintain power and huge amounts of design energy is crafted in certain directions with certain goals (such as policies implementing austerity etc) and I guess the difference between some worldviews is that maybe some people believe people have good intentions, but the consequences are unpredictable… and others believe the intentions to oppress/exploit/pollute etc are explicit and conscious. I guess a lot of our social change theories boil down to how we see humans ha! I often wonder if the people lower on the hierarchy are less likely to see the state or corporations (or whatever actors of power) as potentially benevolent or potential forces of change because they experience the greater violence from them in daily life (repression/prison/people living in polluted areas due to certain companies etc etc). And maybe this daily relationship with violence changes your belief in humans as trustworthy or that there are leadership models capable of care etc. I definitely think all my years of watching the prison service nearly killing my friends has increased my militancy and meant I’ve felt more emotionally alienated from the permaculture community who are perhaps less conflictual with the state/authority.  Anyway, ramble! Thanks for igniting a whole ton of thoughts! 
	•	Oh wow spiritual divide between the self and the self!! Definitely! 
	•	Sp - but so is fear of change,... lots of extra commas  
	•	Sp - voice of fear, needs a space 
	•	Jennifer will love your comparative assessment of the fields  

Supporting Evidence

	•	Great photos!  
	•	Thanks for sharing the sourcebook, definitely some gems in there 
	•	Great resource review - how can you widen/expand your reading? Or have more authors of colour or diverse genders?