Associate Name: Lizandra Barbuto
Main Advisor and OP Reviewer: Jennifer Dauksha-English Morgan

Output Packet #:  	3	Year: Accelerated Capstone MSc
Date Submitted: April, 2021 (third submission)
Date Reviewed: May, 2021
Mark: 74
Grade: B
Self Review: 75
Time Spent on Review: 3.75 hrs

Title of OP: Dreaming in Action

Dear Lizandra,

Wonderful to see the progress on this OP! Congratulations on wrapping up your portfolio!

I'm so grateful to have had the opportunity to read your Output Packet. Thanks for all of your work on both self and planetary levels.

Note to Reviewer of Context: This initial OP was originally labeled OP 2 and was reviewed by Laura Kaestel.  It did not pass review.  Lizandra was then transferred to me as an Advisor. I did a verification review in 2019 and made suggestions for changes.  I then reviewed the OP again in January of 2021 and made another round of suggestions. My final review was completed in May of 2021.

My review is broken into these sections:
1. Evaluation Form 
2. Comments Per Section

Required next step: 
1. Please fix the various links that are missing or broken, particularly the one to your skilfllex tracker and for then to the one for dissemination.  There are several links you refer to that are mentioned in my commentary below.
2. As I can not see the skill flex tracker, I just want to make sure that in OP 5 you do a cumulative assessment that explains the tracking. It’s fine if that is the link used for each OP.
3. I would really like to see you add a more clarifying description of DrDr before diving into dreaming. In the opening you refer to other quadrants but don’t name them or the bigger picture of this model that dreaming is nested within.
4. We need to discuss peer reviews.

Recommended next step:
- I provide several other suggestions below that are recommended for your presentation of this content. The general theme of my recommendations are for extra explicit context, anchoring, and integration. 

I respect your integrity in managing your pathway. I'm glad to be your advisor!

Cheers,
Jennifer

OP REVIEW-------------------------

1. EVALUATION FORM-------------------- 

(attached)

2. COMMENTS PER SECTION---------------

Specification
- Good overview of the project and founder, John Croft. Well done at being succinct on the focus/theme of OP 3. 
- You’re using the word quadrant in opening abstract without really explaining or showing what you mean. Start at pattern level and then explain the detail. I would change the first paragraphs by adding an introductory one or two sentences explaining that Dragon Dreaming consists of four quadrants, and then name then. Follow up by expelling why the focus on Dr Dr. quadrant on dreaming (as you do). Even in the second paragraph you’re referring to the quadrant being of the individual. This feels very out of context. I really think you should add an image of the entire quadrant to anchor the concept, and highlight why this quadrant is unique. 
- Within the introduction - a number of grammatical errors in this opening. I get that you’re using creative writing, so it feels fluid.  What do you mean by a “dream is a dream, just when we wake.” ? Are you saying that other dreaming that is not recognized or remembered isn’t dreaming? Would a sleep scientist (somnologist) agree with that? 
- On how to read the OP - In the opening when you say that there has been a large amount of information presented on DrDr - what are you referring to? In your own portfolio or to the public. Don’t assume the reader knows what you mean, or for that matter has ever even heard of DrDr before this OP. I would highly suggest you be explicit with such statements and provide direct example and references, instead of implied generalizations.  You talk about the first and last section, but not the middle. When you say, there is a page focussing on the individual, it would be less confusing to just name the page directly. This is a very intellectual and conceptual topic, so any clarity and anchoring you can provide for the reader, the better.
- I think this first page could really benefit from a map or graphical image of DrDr and of the OP contents.

OP Design
- First opening paragraph - not sure why you have Gaia University. It’s at the end of the first sentence. Is that a quote or?
- Second section, you mention the design seeming appropriate for this OP, is there any reason this design model or more appropriate than another?
-  Thank you for providing caption on who created the figures (model images).
- I noticed you mentioned feedback in the opening of this page. At what point does feedback link into the various steps of the process? Are feedback loops ongoing? 
- Why the two models? How does GoSADIMET differ from SADIM? It looks like you used SADIM, so why include the other one above? Ok in rereading your passage I now understand that the top model was the one given by Gaia U, whereas the other was a hybrid that you actually choose to use. I was confused as in my mind they are two separate models. They are both log-frame models, however still unique. 

Core Report (1)
- When you mention OP 2, consider adding a link to the OP (intro sentence two).
-  The image of the design model is improperly labeled GoSadimet and should be SADIM. Please update.
- Good description of literature review. I really like the three types of literature reviews you defined. Would be good to consider adding examples. 
- In the DrDr Doc section right column you mention Factsheets 4 and 5 and say they are closed related with the subject. Go ahead and name the subject. I would also encourage you to add a sentence describing in a very general manner, the breadth of content in the other 26 documents that you’re not covering, and mention how a person could access these, if they wanted further information.
- Good overview of the content, especially the last two paragraphs of this document summary section. 
- On the reflection - I like the context your set up stating that this is mostly research though also a personal adventure into your own tracking of dreams (self investigation). 

Core Report (2)
- Again add a link to OP 2 when you mention it in first opening section.
- I do thin that before you go into the dreaming quadrant you could provide one short paragraph summarizing the entire model, at least the four quadrants and refer to figure 1. Then go into the subject matter. In doing so you could position and anchor a reminder as to why this subject on dreaming is so unique or critical to your personal/professional work (enough that you focussed an entire OP on the topic).
- I appreciate that you included a graphic with the four points that you reference.
- Would be maybe helpful to add a link on this page of the two fact sheets so the reader doesn’t have to go back to previous page. Or state that they are linked at bottom of page.
- All of the rest of this page is very useful. You do a good job teaching the reader about the attributes of this quadrant. I like that you speak to the reader as if they were on this learning adventure with you, Example you directly speak to the readers own intention and awareness.
- Value that you provide examples of why this relevant and how each step can be applied. Very helpful.
- In the integration piece, I think it would be helpful if you provided a bit more on Freud and Jung’s work to offer more integrative perspective. You reference them to the appendices. Which is useful but a few sentences here I think would provide extra integration.
- Very nice conclusive statement about flow of life and creating out of meaning.

Supporting Evidence (6-pages)
- Wonderful resource review.
- I like that you started out the support section with your own personal investigations into dreaming. 
- I think the introduction on page 5, last sentence (where you mention the other pages) could benefit with a very quick summary of what a person will find on those other pages). I’m also wanting to see some integrative conclusion that ties together all 6 of these pages - perhaps it could be included here on this landing page that begins the support section.
- Love the dream time story video you added.
- All of these sections you added are lovely additions to providing perspective on dreaming. I do think you might could have included additional resources or context on each page to further flesh out the various contributions, however all in all I think this is a wonderful mix of supporting documentation.

Journal
- Thanks for adding such personal reflections.

Pathway Reflection
- I like how you use questions to guide your reflection for the research project and the OP creation.
- The link you mention under the dissemination section is not active. As i can not view the link, I’m unsure what is included. However, I will note that I would like to see you state your role in workshops and trainings. Can you clarify if you were the producer, the manager, coordinator, teacher, etc… If you play more than one role, please state all roles you held.
-  On feedback, you do not have to respond or incorporate peer review feedback. It is to offer perspective and to give each of you the opportunity to practice giving feedback, also with the intent of hopefully adding more layers to your understanding of the OP template and evaluation criteria.
- Do you have a feedback tracker?
- Link to Gaia Radio presentation is not active.
- Link to google skill flex tracker is not the correct link.