OP Feedback
IDPD Pre-Capstone Phase 
LCR Explicitly articulate what seems obvious Make the theme of each section clear - use titles, state outcomes Use an outline or mind map to show key point that will emerge 
LIPD Create mind maps with clear elements in project, match these to process in design methodology More direct connection to main theme “resilient wellness” throughout More explicit leverage points ‘Critical evaluation’ section lacking 
OP2 More about your process of doing the OP - reflect on experience of creating it Too much abstract intellectualization Contextualize the work you are sharing Separate title page unnecessary Flesh out diagrams with explanations Consider embedding videos from annotated resources into core report Give more insight into solution in the abstract / summary More active voice / less passive voice phrasing in writing Consider finding ways to integrate with existing alternatives 
OP3 
Growing edge - delegating tasks to others / assuming leadership/project manager role Final read through - watch for unnecessary repetition Use permaculture principles explicitly Use the foil/contrast of the land design and OP design as talking point for illustrating implementation phase Add detail to ‘Survey’ stage 
Don’t assume maps/diagrams are self explanatory - make meaning explicit 
Show more of the assessment side of the process - show what you have inferred as a result of testing, mapping, etc. 
Create more of a ‘phased’ design Embrace ’scrum and pause’ approach to work 
OP4 Make visceral the abstract Do more experimentation - make the theory physical in your own world More explicitly articulate stance on the field you are contributing to Enhance design skills by explicitly designing OP and the core report Contextualize core report with introduction titles 3 columns difficult to navigate, hinders flow Develop some clear and concrete examples of ties of theory to permaculture design Create examples of principles in your own work 
OP5 Text heavy in parts - add more imagery Integrate permaculture principles more explicitly Include word count 
Identify edges related to leadership Look for more ways to disseminate Consider using more sidebars to increase multimedia, quotes, etc. Conclusion could have been stronger Consider using 2 design methodologies - one for core report and one for entire OP Look for more opportunities for experimentation / rapid prototyping Consider how you can make ‘delegatable tasks’ within projects Look for opportunities to disseminate material Growing edge: managing people 
IDPD Capstone Phase 
LIPD
Include something more specific about collaboration, participation and use of allies etc. – maybe a mindmap
Articulate how you are pushing edges identified from feedback
Overuse of the passive voice at times
Use color to highlight growth or need for growth with skill flex chart
‘Make the case’ for new model of action learning – what’s wrong with the old one?
More detail about own learning process coming up with new models
Consider creating videos
Consider creating own OP template
Create 2 designs – one for OP and another for the project
Put more emphasis on annotated resource review. Offer more links within report. 

OP2
Text dense at some points
Simplest models are sometimes the most useful 
Create clearer parallels to existing alternatives, what’s working and what needs improvement
Be more explicit about where you intend to find leverage and who you want to engage with
Experiment with using other voices – storytelling/poetic, etc. – very scientific now
Have clear introduction and conclusions in the various sections 
Focus more on your project work / application than on the research/information
Look for opportunities to experiment with different approaches even if you doubt they will work 
More explicit articulation around your process of collaboration and leadership – consider incorporating spiral dynamics language
Create a section for ‘key outcomes’
Benefits to the field too vague, look for more concrete benefits to small steps taken now
OP3
Include more examples of applied theory or case studies
Engage/challenge the reader to apply concepts more explicitly
More reflection on leadership, facilitation and mentoring 
Too much info to absorb in a single OP review 
Add separate title for goals under design methodology
Include links to tools mentioned
Consider utilizing the ‘comment’ option with certain sections/images and encourage the reader to engage more
Highlight/bold key learnings and takeaways 
Consider putting specification before abstract in core report
Give some example of current educational practice not engaging higher-order thinking
Consider recording voice reading some text
Consider making your own videos 
Reread/rewrite abstract after doing critical analysis – was weak
Simplify design process for OP
Use metrics to track how well you are attending to goals 
Include more active experimentation – design projects that make this necessary 
More personal reflection about leadership
Use name for things most common in culture 

OP4
Parts abstract and difficult to digest – jargony 
Further explore synergies and direct application in permaculture – use language and examples that are a part of target market’s experience – meet them where they’re at

 OP5
More clearly draw parallels to permaculture field
Experiment with getting on camera and making more videos
Try out different design methodologies 
Go back and review key un/learnings from each OP cycle, integrate
Be sure to link out to your website and projects

MSC Capstone Phase

LCR
Include introduction to resume elements
Remember to fill out row 2 and 3 in the PoDAPO and before saving scroll back up to the top of the page so when anyone else opens it they are already at the top. 
Make sure you attend to all the elements in the PoDAPO - or at least clearly identify in the specifications which skill-flexes you are consciously developing
Use the Self Review to tell me where you think the particular skill-flex is demonstrated in your OP
Include word count on first page
Show diagram of models that you introduce 
Show design methodology up front
Articulate stories as intervention points
Be clear on the systems your design intends to intervene in
Include design maps, mind maps etc. in supporting evidence
Analyze your un/learnings specifically 
Make more lists and summarized takeaways

LIPD
Include word count on first page
Include introduction on reflection pages
More linking between articulated goals, skill flexes, projects and outcomes 
Include more design documents from EARR framework
Introduce models and put into context 
Put more thought into color design 
Be more explicit about which skill flexes you will be action learning from one project to the next
Add in when you want pro reviews
More articulation with how you will collaborate on projects
Articulate benefits to field with farm project
More clear about how you will disseminate
Be clear about how you will track impacts of your actions 

OP2
Focus more on the PoDAPO form / see ALCW spreadsheet to include all required elements
Map out how you use the design framework in greater detail for both OP and project work
List the specific skill flexes you want to develop for this cycle
Show your OP and project management systems and describe how you used them
Focus core report more on purpose/process/interventions/description of outcomes - move project outcomes themselves to supporting evidence
Look to highlight your design thinking used
Look to define terms/phrases that reader may not understand
Link resources mentioned in Commentary and Core Report to Annotated Resources section
Use more formal structure for annotated resources
More in-depth in Pathway Tracking about what was stated in LIPD and what changed
Include a comment or notes about events in Participation Records
Include screenshot of Trello board
Refer back to previous OP’s skill flex assessment